Shrinking story - The Null Hypothesis (and other works)
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Hello there! I’ve been writing a (terrible) shrink story over the past few weeks, and looking for feedback. It does require a lot of editing, but at least it’s down on the page, eh? https://archiveofourown.org/works/29010579/chapters/71345811 Here’s the link to the latest chapter if you want to see.
Let me know what you think?
I’ve also got some vignettes that have been floating around for a while which I have never really developed, but will post in this thread. Please, do give feedback!
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@crosyn interesting. From the title I thought this might be a “Big Bang Theory” fanfic at first. This story is well crafted. You did a good job of differentiating the characters, giving the personalities and motivations. Which can be difficult in a short piece.
I have to admit, I was heartened when the began to grow back. I realize that my interest in SW who can be measured in terms of a few feet rather than a few inches makes me an outlayer. Still, I got the impression that you may have had a bit more story to tell.
seeya
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@sallyfourth Good lord no, I’d never do a Big Bang Theory fanfic: if I do, send the police.
And yes, the story is not done yet. I’m just adding to it as I go, really. Thank you for the comments!
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Poor Michelle just got to have a small taste. I wonder how much her mind will fixate on it as they try to go back to normal? I think it was fun that we got to see 2 complete opposite reactions. Also the first few chapters made me really miss going to a crowded bar with friends lol
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@crosyn said in Shrink story:
@sallyfourth Good lord no, I’d never do a Big Bang Theory fanfic: if I do, send the police.
And yes, the story is not done yet. I’m just adding to it as I go, really. Thank you for the comments!
I sort of wanted to take a crack at a BBT Sw story but I couldn’t figure out how to stay true to the characters and still write it in my own style. It just wasn’t going to work.
I’m looking forward to seeing the continuation of this story.
seeya
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@sallyfourth Ahh, right right. And thank you! It’s not done yet obviously, but it’ll rumble on for another few chapters.
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Love it. Please keep going!
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You’ve done a marvelous job of crafting together an interesting scene and characters I can’t wait see get involved in more shrunken misadventures.
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@lil It’ll roll on for another few chapters, but need to actually write the story. Thanks tho
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@green can’t go wrong with university shrinking, innit. And cheers!
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She looked up at him, slightly terrified and yet filled with wonder. She had…dreamed? Wondered? Lusted? after this moment for years. She had loved the idea of shrinking for so long, and finally it had been achieved. A thrill ran through her, almost delirious at the new feelings that were running through her. Her knees almost gave way as she focused on him. He smiled.
“So, how does it feel to be… shrunken?” He laughed, his voice tinged with the same emotions that were running through hers at a million miles an hour. His face was so huge in comparison to her. She couldn’t have been more than… five inches tall? Maybe four? Everything loomed over her. A mug soared over her, and she didn’t even want to think how big the distance was between the table and the floor. The ceiling was so far away, it was almost the sky. The general debris on the desk scattered everywhere seemed like hilarious parodies of usual objects, being enormous to her. Yet, they were normal sized. SHE was the shrunken one. With all of these thought swimming in her head and thinking how to respond, she didn’t see him moving his hand in a general matter-of-fact manner in a way that collided with her by accident, forcing her onto her back with a tiny crash. She gasped in surprise and fragility. How did he not realise that he had to be more careful? He was so clumsy when they were the same size, and now she was shrunken… he really had to take extra care. With this in mind, and his increasingly frantic apologies, she looked him in his (enormous) eye, and grinned.
“It’s fucking hot.” she said in a sultry manner.
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@littlenichole Writing the two completely opposite reactions (I do have to go over the rest of the story with a fine comb at some stage, as I think I mix up a name or two at some point!) was very fun! And yeah, that was my intention too when writing the pub scene. Consider it my Ode to the Pub.
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@crosyn https://archiveofourown.org/works/29010579/chapters/72408966 This is focused on shrinking, but will have more sexual stuff next time. Let me know what you think! I’m worried it’s a bit too…obvious, but hey ho.
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OH my gosh poor Emma
fate has a twisted sense of humor making her the smaller one. I’m sure they can get the machine working again tho…probobly no need to panic 
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@littlenichole Balance will be restored.
