The lastest: Double-Teamed
I find her stuff enchanting, and I’m still interested in seeing the original footage of her in the mocap suit. Discord | Patreon
The lastest: Double-Teamed
I find her stuff enchanting, and I’m still interested in seeing the original footage of her in the mocap suit. Discord | Patreon
What a fucking bastard.
I really like how you hint at the (pre-shrinking) history between Andrew and Nia without giving us more than we need to know. Similarly, we get to imagine for ourselves the range of tortures and humiliations he inflicted upon her, which of course makes them worse.
“Before you always looked down on everyone…so we made it so you could never do it again…"
That “we” is highly intriguing…
On a technical note, I wonder if the narrative might flow better if all the action was in the past tense rather than the present. This could easily be just a matter of taste, but to me it would feel more organic and less like, say, the transcript of a roleplaying session. YMMV.
Also, “you’re” instead of “your.”
But yeah, he really played her desperation like a fiddle, and it was delicious.
@kisupure said in Petrichor - a novel in "open beta" - [M/f, minigiant, post-apocalyptic dystopia, slavery, military setting]:
What was he doing? His words were plain, but they were slippery, muddy, hiding things. Is this how he talked to Finch for a whole week? He made this seem so strangely urgent, like she was running out of time.
Like the pheromone, she can detect the foreboding but she cannot see the cause.
So, hey, this is still functional.
Master
Tourist
Age: 36
Victim
Secretary
Age: 30
Race: Caucasian
Hair color: black
Hair style: long twin tails
New size: 3"
cause for shrinking: shrink potion in bath water
Duration
Ten years
Storage of the SW when not in use
in a bird cage
Clothes
doll dress
Special
SW will be abused in public
SW has to help capture and shrink other women
Things master will do frequently
feel SW up
spank SW with a ruler
improvise bondage
lick SW
Services the SW has to perform
act as living remote control
The End
SW escapes