@Nyx Thank you SO MUCH Nyx. I was told by someone else on another platform that the way I write is still very “purple”, and I couldn’t quite wrap my head around that… I guess I like to take a scalpel to my characters’ inner lives and that’s considered egregiously descriptive in the normal lit world. Oh well, I’m lucky that kink readers like that sort of thing! (I’ve started calling it “stylistic overwhelm”.) And hope you enjoy more weirdness coming from characters on both sides of the war here soon.
I don’t think that your prose is purple at all…in fact, your style is one of the things that I like about your stories (besides the very large men, of course ). It flows well and it’s easy to immerse myself in your writing, and I would eagerly read any non-size fiction that you wrote. And honestly, I wish that more writers spent time on their characters’ inner lives. That’s part of the thrill for me as a reader, experiencing a character’s emotions and how they react to both mundane events and life-altering ones.
As for Chapter 6, I like how more mysteries were introduced, including the human-sized cigarettes (and whether there are humans living with or working with the Anakim). The fact that the sentinel is touch-starved was surprisingly heartbreaking, and I realized that both he and Gray are sort of outsiders. Gray seems to want to rebel in her own ways, including pocketing the cigarette and agreeing to a rendezvous with the sentinel, and I have to wonder if this behavior will eventually get her into deep trouble.