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@kisupure said in Petrichor - a novel in "open beta" - [M/f, minigiant, post-apocalyptic dystopia, slavery, military setting]:

I’ve heard from a couple people who want me to change the writing style to “appeal” to a broader audience

Here?

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@kisupure said in KP's Garbage Doodles (All M/ ):

That said, I think I made him a foot too tall here sob

Really? I was expecting him to be bigger.

@sloppy_amy She might indeed. Better learn to tuck herself out of the way.

@sloppy_amy Of course. It’s not very comfortable for her, but it’s convenient for me.

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@sloppy_amy His. We wanna see her expression so it’s nice that he’s curling his left arm back instead of holding himself up with both arms (as I would have done), but it was clever of KP to have him guarding the magazine on his kicker. Either way, that brachioradialus is flexed.

I originally thought this illustration would be from Gray’s POV on the ground, looking up at the crouching sentinel. But seeing her grimace while trying to read him is better.

@kisupure Those arms…

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Conn’s Bowl Of Yummy Ladies by Jessica Rae

@kisupure said in Petrichor - a novel in "open beta" - [M/f, minigiant, post-apocalyptic dystopia, slavery, military setting]:

The enlisted/officer divide is a staple of military fiction, but what was once rooted in static social classes became more permeable with the rise of “professional” soldiers and recruitment. With the Disruption sending us back to serfdom, however, a battlefield commission is less a promotion than an ennobling.

Corpsmen are still enslaved, as Finch’s lack of good choices demonstrates. Captains leading armed bondsmen aren’t quite overseers or feudal lords, but the 'Naks and harsh environment seem to provide the rest of the discipline necessary to keep the corpsmen loyal. Until now, that is.

Still, Gray suddenly didn’t like how [Wesson] was taking up space.

Not as much space as some do…

animal impiety

Nice.

As far as I can tell, you haven’t disturbed the conventional wisdom that there are no female Anakim, but you have allowed that it might not be possible to engineer an humanoid effectively for combat without giving it a libido. I don’t suppose I have to remind you how non-neutered adult human males have historically behaved in prolonged single-sex environments.

What does fear pheromone smell like to other 'Naks? Pleasant? Noxious? Undetectable? Is suppression against orders?

(source needed)

@kisupure Nice misdirect with the opening Manual excerpt. I was partially expecting Gray to be promoted.

Also surprised that Gray reported the sentinel’s calling off the pursuit. It doesn’t incriminate her in any way, but it does put a spotlight on his loyalties.

Did . . . Gray rub one out after her stroll and before her nap?

@sloppy_amy