Best posts made by Olo

@comrade Fyrir Jórvík!

What updates are being considered urgent, or at all?

This grabbed my attention from the start. We got a lot of good detail about Kimberly’s captivity, and I always appreciate tinies dwelling on their distress and inconveniences. More importantly, you’ve established Kimberly’s voice, which is crucial for us to care about what happens to her.

Another revealing aspect is how your dialogue is only half the conversation; the eye directions, facial expressions, and body language are at least as important as what is said. Being introduced to Kimberly in the box adds an important dimension to her reactions in the club. It’s a common device, but you use it well.

Aaron seems a right bastard, so it will be dismaying to see Kimberly fall into his clutches. More rewarding will being see her go through the contortions to accommodate her new reality.

@kc_giant Love these beefy, hairy giants!

@SmolChlo That’s wonderful news!

I wish SizeCon did in-person events again (and in my area)…

@Mrgoblinging7 I, for one, object to describing these statistical compilers as “intelligent.” Same for large language models like ChatGPT. They’re parlor tricks, and if you accept their output as art or literature that just shows how low your standards are.

@kisupure You are really good at increasing the tension while keeping us focused on all the stakes. I also admire that for every mystery you remove (Sentinel’s got a crush!), you add another (why is the fear pheromone inconstant?). I also liked the detail of the local gentry having an embassy with Fox’s commander. So neo-feudal.

Gray lying to save her skin and put Kessler in the soup was cold. She better not wind up in the same foxhole with him later.

A little aerial recon would go a long way in this setting. Did I miss an explanation for its lack?

I’m glad you explained “nalezing.” At first I was afraid the sisters-in-arms were being ordered to stand down.

Couple of cavils:

“Better not be any spiders in here,” she whispered, thinking on the irony of being killed by a brown recluse in the middle of this.

I’m afraid you failed to describe Gray finding a crevice for cover before she was already in it.

As much as [Gray] hated the Corps . . .

When did that happen? It was my impression that Gray thought of the Corps as the last best hope, both for her and for humanity.

Illustration prompt: Sentinel wincing as he’s shielding Gray and taking the shrapnel.

@sally-g My rule is if an artist creates a DD account themselves, I won’t post their work here (hi @GiantessLover45 !). Mikester65 deleted his DA account and I haven’t seen him in a while, so I’m going through his folder on my hard drive.

@The-Big-G It doesn’t matter who they cast, Disney will never let her get any action.

@tiny-ivy “Statistically-generated content,” to really capture the lack of creative agency.

@kisupure Keep the spiders where they are, just add a sentence before it, describing how Gray found an arroyo in the dark.

@caddyisraddy Ken always has morning wood.

@Mrgoblinging7 Wait’ll they hear about the two Lost Boys who are twin black girls.

@johnnymcshrink That sort of thing is definitely allowed. If you feel uncomfortable about posting them in Artwork (since they’re unedited), you could always post them in Other Media. Just be sure to use all applicable tags!

@kisupure 9th-years. Oh yeah, that makes sense. Should be some snappy jargon to refer to “graduates.”

Regarding Gray and her “hatred” of the Corps, it’s perfectly reasonable for her to resent the Corps as its regulations impinge more and more upon her interest in the sentinel. It’ll be totally subconscious, tho.