@kisupure said in Petrichor - a novel in "open beta" - [M/f, minigiant, post-apocalyptic dystopia, slavery, military setting]:
What was he doing? His words were plain, but they were slippery, muddy, hiding things. Is this how he talked to Finch for a whole week? He made this seem so strangely urgent, like she was running out of time.
Like the pheromone, she can detect the foreboding but she cannot see the cause.
@tiny-ivy I don’t know how many times I’ve started a Magic School Bus fanfic and then dropped it because I didn’t want anyone to think I wanted to write smut featuring minors. 
What a fucking bastard.
I really like how you hint at the (pre-shrinking) history between Andrew and Nia without giving us more than we need to know. Similarly, we get to imagine for ourselves the range of tortures and humiliations he inflicted upon her, which of course makes them worse.
“Before you always looked down on everyone…so we made it so you could never do it again…"
That “we” is highly intriguing…
On a technical note, I wonder if the narrative might flow better if all the action was in the past tense rather than the present. This could easily be just a matter of taste, but to me it would feel more organic and less like, say, the transcript of a roleplaying session. YMMV.
Also, “you’re” instead of “your.”
But yeah, he really played her desperation like a fiddle, and it was delicious.
@dr-tol said in Casual encounters:
@olo what?.. I know, I know, my English is not that good X3
I just thought your post was stupendous. I wish I could borrow your toy.
Amusing footnote to Bad Channels: At the end of the film, one minor character, Bunny (Daryl Strauss), was not restored to full size and remained eight inches tall.
The studio behind the film, Full Moon Pictures, wanted to have a crossover between three of its franchises, Bad Channels, Dollman, and Demonic Toys. The result was Dollman vs. Demonic Toys, pairing Dollman with the last shrunken woman from Bad Channels. Unfortunately, Daryl Strauss was unavailable (perhaps she got some better career advice), so they retconned the end of Bad Channels and made “Nurse Ginger” the one woman who remained tiny. Happily, Melissa Behr brought her obvious charms to the role.
Oh, that was nice. His hands on her spine and the back of her head were the best. And of course dialogue is the best way to explore characters. I’m pretty sure no human ever gets used to a Nak’s voice.
“W-we’ve got forty minutes,” was the first thing she said. Gray could have smacked herself for how unsexy of an opener that was.
Honey, he’s here. You don’t need to close the sale.
“Spoken like a true corpsman.”
How would you know, Traitor?
Booker rumbled deep in his chest
Um, I don’t believe we’ve been introduced.
something told her that he hadn’t risked life and limb just to get her off
You never know.
gentle and mealy
Such a nasty thing to say.
She glanced up, suddenly sheepish and feeling very, very small now.
Aaand now you have your next illustration.
Gray was still busy swallowing the last of his cum as she went to sit beside him.
I guess now she can afford to swap her daily protein ration for a friday.
“Let’s do that again,” he said.
[Moonstruck Cher:] “Snap out of it!”
They are so doomed.
@hentaihunter1 Not at all, I just wanted to clarify that it’s not my work. 
@The-Big-G It doesn’t matter who they cast, Disney will never let her get any action.
@tiny-ivy Tim Thomerson never phones it in.
Fingering is underrated. It always scales up in my head.
“I’ve been thinking about you a lot,” she murmured, the words coming out between little moans. Unfortunately, she realized too late that this made her sound hopelessly sentimental. He cocked a brow at her but didn’t even slow down.
“You can’t?” There seemed to be a little enjoyment there at her expense.
“You know what I meant.”
I’m guessing there’s a draft where Gray’s first line is “I can’t stop thinking about you.”
“You really are fuckin’ dense.”
Someone oughta tell Rice that negging isn’t cool.
I have some guesses about why Rice rucked her out on that little field trip, but the bottom line is that he wanted to show her why he hates fighting for the Algo.
@Mrgoblinging7 Wait’ll they hear about the two Lost Boys who are twin black girls.
