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@taedis The question is, after a certain point, would that word even stop her?

@cyberpool said in Inspection:

These are so well drawn, who’s the artist?

Unknown Hand

@blehb I’m coming to Unaware from about the same place you are, a mostly accidental “no-fault” encounter. After listening to the episode, I have a better appreciation of how some people see it a kind of violation that they fantasize they can get away with undetected. I suspect that’s the framing they first encountered and they “imprinted” on that. I’m sure hundreds of people watched Honey I Shrunk Te Kids and came away with the notion that Vore should also be Unaware.

A giant rampaging through a city and an unaware person causing havoc for tiny people can be grouped together as “Indifferent.” The Biggo isn’t pursuing a relationship with the tinies around them, they’re just doing their own thing and it’s up to everyone else to get out of their way.

I went to the page for this episode on Aborigen’s blog and left a comment that went into this a bit deeper. Aborigen is really eager for feedback, and I encourage everyone to go to his page and tell him what you think of each episode, including where he gets it wrong.

Excellent job representing the M/f side of things @Olo You did great!

Thank you!

This grabbed my attention from the start. We got a lot of good detail about Kimberly’s captivity, and I always appreciate tinies dwelling on their distress and inconveniences. More importantly, you’ve established Kimberly’s voice, which is crucial for us to care about what happens to her.

Another revealing aspect is how your dialogue is only half the conversation; the eye directions, facial expressions, and body language are at least as important as what is said. Being introduced to Kimberly in the box adds an important dimension to her reactions in the club. It’s a common device, but you use it well.

Aaron seems a right bastard, so it will be dismaying to see Kimberly fall into his clutches. More rewarding will being see her go through the contortions to accommodate her new reality.

Edenian Snack [Sub-Zero-Tanya]
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@The-Big-G If any of you have any reaction at all to any element of the podcast, I implore you to go to Aborigen’s blog and leave a comment.

@kisupure You are really good at increasing the tension while keeping us focused on all the stakes. I also admire that for every mystery you remove (Sentinel’s got a crush!), you add another (why is the fear pheromone inconstant?). I also liked the detail of the local gentry having an embassy with Fox’s commander. So neo-feudal.

Gray lying to save her skin and put Kessler in the soup was cold. She better not wind up in the same foxhole with him later.

A little aerial recon would go a long way in this setting. Did I miss an explanation for its lack?

I’m glad you explained “nalezing.” At first I was afraid the sisters-in-arms were being ordered to stand down.

Couple of cavils:

“Better not be any spiders in here,” she whispered, thinking on the irony of being killed by a brown recluse in the middle of this.

I’m afraid you failed to describe Gray finding a crevice for cover before she was already in it.

As much as [Gray] hated the Corps . . .

When did that happen? It was my impression that Gray thought of the Corps as the last best hope, both for her and for humanity.

Illustration prompt: Sentinel wincing as he’s shielding Gray and taking the shrapnel.

C036 by Cariwebo

@foreverlurk I don’t believe there’s any context other than that Marino only follows or is followed by other known size pervs.

@kisupure Keep the spiders where they are, just add a sentence before it, describing how Gray found an arroyo in the dark.

@giant-gripper

Episode 008 just dropped. Aborigen puts his foot down.

@kisupure 9th-years. Oh yeah, that makes sense. Should be some snappy jargon to refer to “graduates.”

Regarding Gray and her “hatred” of the Corps, it’s perfectly reasonable for her to resent the Corps as its regulations impinge more and more upon her interest in the sentinel. It’ll be totally subconscious, tho.

First Day on the Job by Cariwebo

@littlest-lily I’m fairly certain my personality will be affected when I perfect my shrink ray.