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by Nirdgerl

@littlest-lily I almost linked this, too (it’s a three-hour video). Key concept: “Disavowal.” Enjoying guilt-inducing pleasure by attributing the desire for it to the monster and disavowing that you wanted it yourself.

This grabbed my attention from the start. We got a lot of good detail about Kimberly’s captivity, and I always appreciate tinies dwelling on their distress and inconveniences. More importantly, you’ve established Kimberly’s voice, which is crucial for us to care about what happens to her.

Another revealing aspect is how your dialogue is only half the conversation; the eye directions, facial expressions, and body language are at least as important as what is said. Being introduced to Kimberly in the box adds an important dimension to her reactions in the club. It’s a common device, but you use it well.

Aaron seems a right bastard, so it will be dismaying to see Kimberly fall into his clutches. More rewarding will being see her go through the contortions to accommodate her new reality.

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@littlest-lily Funnily enough, this was the first one (!). It was recommended by another Size writer who watched it and was chagrined to realize that his most recent story was actually a gender-swapped Twilight, to which I replied with:

@kisupure You are really good at increasing the tension while keeping us focused on all the stakes. I also admire that for every mystery you remove (Sentinel’s got a crush!), you add another (why is the fear pheromone inconstant?). I also liked the detail of the local gentry having an embassy with Fox’s commander. So neo-feudal.

Gray lying to save her skin and put Kessler in the soup was cold. She better not wind up in the same foxhole with him later.

A little aerial recon would go a long way in this setting. Did I miss an explanation for its lack?

I’m glad you explained “nalezing.” At first I was afraid the sisters-in-arms were being ordered to stand down.

Couple of cavils:

“Better not be any spiders in here,” she whispered, thinking on the irony of being killed by a brown recluse in the middle of this.

I’m afraid you failed to describe Gray finding a crevice for cover before she was already in it.

As much as [Gray] hated the Corps . . .

When did that happen? It was my impression that Gray thought of the Corps as the last best hope, both for her and for humanity.

Illustration prompt: Sentinel wincing as he’s shielding Gray and taking the shrapnel.

Lennie by Maria Panfilova

@littlest-lily In our society, anything teenage girls like must be destroyed.

@kisupure Keep the spiders where they are, just add a sentence before it, describing how Gray found an arroyo in the dark.

@shrunkenlaura The original image is gone, but I think giant couples are okay as long as the tiny is female.

@mrgoblinging7 Of course you weren’t being unreasonable. Basic courtesy required them to honor your requests and boundaries. People seem to forget their manners on the internet, particularly in the anonymous world of smut.

I wouldn’t consider this person’s conduct acceptable even if they paid for a commission in advance, which I’m guessing they didn’t. If this was an unpaid request (aka a favor), I would have thought you justified in dropping the whole project after the first time you set some boundaries and they ignored it.

@kisupure 9th-years. Oh yeah, that makes sense. Should be some snappy jargon to refer to “graduates.”

Regarding Gray and her “hatred” of the Corps, it’s perfectly reasonable for her to resent the Corps as its regulations impinge more and more upon her interest in the sentinel. It’ll be totally subconscious, tho.

@giantesslover45 Happy to credit you! Is there an online source you want linked?

Episode 012 just dropped. Final ep for a while.

@kisupure Nice misdirect with the opening Manual excerpt. I was partially expecting Gray to be promoted.

Also surprised that Gray reported the sentinel’s calling off the pursuit. It doesn’t incriminate her in any way, but it does put a spotlight on his loyalties.

Did . . . Gray rub one out after her stroll and before her nap?